Crunch: The Sailor
Writing Exercise #19
Here’s another one, this time inspired by Mermay again following an unfortunate or serendipitous misunderstanding of
’s drawing on Day 9.If you have ideas for Prompts, Crunches, Sprints, Relays, or other writing exercises in the future, please leave them in the comments! If you would like to write your own take for this exercise, please comment with a link so that I can see what you wrote and support your work, maybe even share your version with my subscribers. Please let me know if you have any thoughts, comments, or constructive criticisms as well!
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Crunch: Write about a heartbroken mermaid plus a silly octopus and maybe a phone
She held the magic shell up to her ear. He said, “Meet me at the docks tonight.” She looked at Cubert, her Cuttlefish. Cubert changed his color to look like a field of static, as if to say he doesn’t know what it means.
She swam around her room with nervous energy. Something wasn’t right. These last few months they had settled into a routine. They would talk at set times—when her nosey and judgmental father wasn’t around—and on weekends she would go to the docks and they would spend time together. This was…out of the routine. It made her anxious.
Cubert began displaying relaxing waves of blue and green to try and calm her down.
“It’s not helping!” she said. “Something isn’t right!”
When evening came, she went to the docks early. She hid under the dock—she didn’t want to seem too eager. She watched and waited.
He arrived! Her heart stopped. She started to move towards him but noticed—he had some friends with him. They had bottles in their hands. He pinned a note to the pillar. His friends put a consoling hand on his shoulders—and he walked away.
Her heart pounded in her ears. She rose to the surface, and very carefully opened the note, so as not to get it wet.
Dear Tethys,
It’s over. It could never be. I am getting on a ship tonight. I’m sorry.
= = =
“It’s alright, mate. It’s the right thing. Ya done good.” His friend said.
In the distance, he could hear her wailing.
(261 words, I do what I want)
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I wrote a microficition about a mermaid, so I did have fun with 'mermay'.
And the Kingdom of Atlantis is the biggest importer of American beef. Yes, even larger than the People's Republic of China and the Martian Imperium.
I don't have experience with dating and didn't do Mermay, but I think mermaids would have land food restaurants at high prices due to issues with getting it. Though they'd also be into sea food. Because fish tend to eat other fish.
The story itself is rather sad.