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Very Ray Bradbury...and that's meant as a compliment...!

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You have no idea how high that praise is to me! Thank you!!

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The ending got me choked up. Well done!

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Thats what I like to hear! 😂 Thank you!

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Spoken like a true Anne Shirley-esque writer--always hoping to make readers cry!

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You weren't the only one.

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Same!

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This is one of the best short stories I’ve ever read, full stop.

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Wow, Cole. Wow. Thank you so much.

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Phenomenal!

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Thank you so much!

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Oi, watch it, that's my heart you just stomped on...

But seriously, lovely story, great momentum all the way to the end.

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Really happy you enjoyed it, thank you very much for reading!

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This was actually too good. To say I was choked up at the end would be an understatement. Pure magic, Scoot. Well done 👏

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My work here is done 😎 thank you Jeff, it really means a lot!

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What intensity moment of life within all those words

Remind me many moments of my motherhood experience

The power of life itself . Muito bonito e as imagens são lindas e fortes

Thank you

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I am so happy you enjoyed! I am glad to hear there’s something for everyone in this one 🙏

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Right in the feels, Scoot. Right in the feels. This was one of the best things I've read in a long time. This was worthy of Arthur C. Clarke even. Well done.

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😭 Clarke and Bradbury comparisons in comments for the same story! You gotta be careful man, im gonna get an ego. Thank you--I am really happy this resonated! Thank you for reading!

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It really did, man. Maybe it's because we've used the "I can do hard things" in our home ourselves, maybe it was the stuffy, maybe it's just because it was that good, or all of it together; it really did resonate.

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Simply amazing. Wow my friend. That is truly an incredible story. I definitely teared up and that does not happen often. Read it now people!

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Thank you, man. I really appreciate that you enjoyed it and thank you so much for sharing it!

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Wow. This is such a tenderly written story. I know you said this was a doozy, but the read went by so quickly for me. I don’t know how you managed to build this world up with such detail in such a short amount of time. Just so perfect

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Its been living in my head for a long time--it finally had matured enough that it spilled out the right way. Thank you so much for reading 🙏 it means a lot!

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Aaaaaand now I’m crying into the pasta pot that I was stirring as I read this.

So intense, so sad, so lovely.

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Your pasta has been blessed with a little extra salt! Thank you for reading Bridget! 🙏

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This is too real

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I was reading this during the boys BJJ class and that was probably a mistake on my part. This is a lovely story, well done.

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I hope you brought an onion in your pocket and started cutting it so you had an excuse 😂 thank you so much Walther!

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Gotta try to regain some composure to write this comment. What a masterpiece on so many levels--love, sacrifice, death, but i can't express all those levels because i can't think through tears.

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🙏🙏🙏 i am really happy you enjoyed the story. Thank you so much!

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Gosh dangit scoot you hit me right in the feels, brother. This was such a good and hard read.

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🙏🙏🙏 i hope your pasta has been blessed also. Sorry not sorry. Thank you for reading Sara!!

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I don't really read a lot of fiction on Substack, but after seeing this come up multiple times, I am not disappointed. This was gooood. Ironically, it's about a father and son.

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Excellent story. Bravo.

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