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Niiiiiice. So many questions! Was the ghost talking to Jonah the whole time? Does Jonah have his own ghost? Does Jonah see dead people? Is he the only elder? Who're the kids?

This is a fascinating world and I would like more please. :)

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I can't wait to hear this story - whosever it is!

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Nice!! I forgot to do my flash fiction today. Tomorrow is another day

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Oooh, great start! I hope it ends up being 3 parts because it's a delicious treat of a tale. I don't want it to end too soon, but love the pace of the unfolding so am sure you'll linger long enough for our ultimate storytelling pleasure. Looking forward to part two.

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What an unexpected treat - a surprise serial from Scoot. Strong dialogue throughout - all the exchanges with the doctor, Layla, and the man at the end do a good job of keeping things tense and mysterious.

My vote is for 3 parts.

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Love it. Waiting for more.....

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