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Love it!! Let me tell you, capturing natural dialogue in a "written interview" style is tough, but you NAILED it. I could hear every character in my head. Worth all the effort, Scoot! :D

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🙏🙏🙏 Thank you very much! I am glad you enjoyed! My season 1 attempt was only thru Clydes point of view, but you can see how that was challenging. Interview worked for Sandbox Earth, lets see if lightning can strike twice 😂

Anyway, I appreciate your comment! Im glad to think we’re not making this easy for Brian!

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First of all, this gave me so many great laughs. I also love the framework of the story. The way it played out in my mind was black and white detective flick with narrator guiding me through it. And I love the way Clyde's character develops. Not an easy feat in a short story. I love the poignant moments of realization behind bars after his conversation with the bailiff. "I've wasted my time and I have a time machine!" And I can't get away from how awesome it is that the Pacos showed up at the moment the time machine turned on. That is seriously the best! :D you've got my vote!

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Thank you so much 🙏🙏🙏 i am glad it was entertaining and especially glad you enjoyed some of the ideas I brought to bear!

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Marvellous tale. Did not see the apocalypse refugee crisis coming, what a brilliant idea for time travel. Clyde is believable as a man who would frit his money away for sure, his boyhood daytrading for more lunch is hilarious. Bravo!

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I was proud of that apocalypse refugee idea, been sitting on that for a while! I hope its enough! Thank you for reading and boosting!

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Loved the apocalypse refugee idea; I could see something like that happening if time travel were real, I mean, where else would you go? Brilliant!

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Thank you very much!

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You did it, you gave me a time travel story that I actually see as believable! Like others have said, the refugees were a brilliant addition! I love that Clyde will get his chance at life!

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Thank you very much!! I am glad it felt real, that was the goal! Thank you for reading!

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Well played, Scoot.

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