OK, that was AWESOME! I could perfectly imagine the scene, the characters, the environment. The image just gives a little nudge, but you've filled in the gaps in such a way that I could feel the cold air coming from the window (I even shivered a bit). I know there's more to this story, but you've given me just enough to say, "Wow!"
I’m looking forward to seeing them again. They are reminiscent of Elijah Baley and R. Daneel Olivaw from The Caves of Steel. Ok, going to go watch season two of Foundation now. 😬
Great atmosphere right from the start. Love the poem too! I can see the story could continue but because of the poem it doesn't need too, it can sit in technoir smoke filled mystery quite happily. Bravo!
I can't take credit for the poem, that's just something I learned recently and I loved it. It's the last stanza of "Ode On Solitude" by Alexander Pope!
Thank you, though! "Technoir smoke filled mystery" is such a good phrase haha I am glad I hit the mark!
Like the others have said, the tech noir feel to this is great! Different from most of the things I read regularly, which is so nice! Wonderful job, Scoot!
What an excellent idea for a prompt AND an excellent story. I think the temperature actually dropped around me while reading! haha. Can't wait to find who he was.
And I too was really impressed by the use of poetry here.
OK, that was AWESOME! I could perfectly imagine the scene, the characters, the environment. The image just gives a little nudge, but you've filled in the gaps in such a way that I could feel the cold air coming from the window (I even shivered a bit). I know there's more to this story, but you've given me just enough to say, "Wow!"
Thank you so much! The image was too good not to write something dark and "tech-noir". I have a sneaking suspicion we'll see these characters again!
I’m looking forward to seeing them again. They are reminiscent of Elijah Baley and R. Daneel Olivaw from The Caves of Steel. Ok, going to go watch season two of Foundation now. 😬
I love me some tech noir. Bladerunner is a top 5 GOAT universe for me. And this definitely scratched that itch!
Very cool prompt and enticing story to go along with it
Thank you so much Taegan!
Bladerunner is a classic! Love the practical effects!
It was a murder disguised as a suicide. He was killed...
By a bounty hunter.
(just kidding)
Youre not far off though 😂 hopefully the crossover is a little subtle!
The robot was a dead giveaway :D
I think you’re on to something.
A murder disguised as a suicide...well, well, well.
Great atmosphere right from the start. Love the poem too! I can see the story could continue but because of the poem it doesn't need too, it can sit in technoir smoke filled mystery quite happily. Bravo!
I can't take credit for the poem, that's just something I learned recently and I loved it. It's the last stanza of "Ode On Solitude" by Alexander Pope!
Thank you, though! "Technoir smoke filled mystery" is such a good phrase haha I am glad I hit the mark!
Like the others have said, the tech noir feel to this is great! Different from most of the things I read regularly, which is so nice! Wonderful job, Scoot!
Thank you very much!
What an excellent idea for a prompt AND an excellent story. I think the temperature actually dropped around me while reading! haha. Can't wait to find who he was.
And I too was really impressed by the use of poetry here.
Well done Scoot!
Thank you Derek! It was a fun mood to experiment with!