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Author John G. Dyer's avatar

I haven't read fantasy in more than 30 years, but I enjoyed this. Good work!

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Brannley Miller's avatar

YAN DA-WIL! YAN DA-WIL! YAN DA-WIL!

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J. M. Allen's avatar

I love that Julian was the one to figure it out! And that Henri doesn't have to haunt him.

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Richard Ritenbaugh's avatar

Manheim's impatience will get him killed in time, not just trapped.

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Bridget's avatar

Cool chapter. I am reminded of good old Colossal Cave in the game Adventure.

There are some "it's" that should be "its" (if "it is" would not make sense there, leave out the apostrophe).

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The Casual Writer's avatar

Play stupid games, Manheim...

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Lyndsey Resnick's avatar

I'm not sure I was supposed to laugh when Varus said, "I don't think that was the book." but I did. This is a great story. Can't wait to see what happens next.

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E.B. Howard's avatar

Good on him rescuing Manheim('s book)! It hadn't even occurred to me that you could put books within books. Stories within stories...

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Skeptic Fail's avatar

Will Julian's mercy extend only so far as to rescue the book? No. He dangles bacon over the pages, and they fall forward into the red light.

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Sara Dietz's avatar

TRADE MANHEIM. JUST HAND YAN DAWIL THE WHOLE BOOK AND BE DONE WITH THAT FOOL.

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