I absolutely loved this! The big difference in how the kids talked versus Jubal was so well written! I think my favorite part was at the beginning: "No cap, bruh." That made me laugh so hard. That and when the drone identified him as a woodland creature 😂😂
Oh Scoot this was wonderful! I love coming into this world through the eyes of a protagonist so detached from the pain of the prompt. There was a fantastic juggling of scifi/horror and humor in this entire story, from the conversation between Jubal and the strangers, to the flying machine's categorization of Jubal as a "Woodland creature," I enjoyed this whole ride.
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I for one appreciated Jubal's proper use of y'all; growing up across the river from Kentucky, I was taught early on that y'all can be used for a group smaller than five, above that it's "all y'all." :) This was awesome; the kids' dialogue and Jubal's were spot-on!
That makes a lot of sense--that must be one of those folk-grammar rules I have some how assimilated without really knowing. But you're right! Glad you enjoyed, thanks Michael!
Your narration cracked me up; I loved it! Jubal explaining about their dumb idea was just hilarious. I agree with you about the beautiful scenery of the Appalachians; my wife and I spent our honeymoon in Gatlinburg in Tennessee, and those hills are just stunning.
Also: now I'm wondering how a robot would categorize me: I'm still on Facebook but not Twitter, and my Facebook picture is my childhood stuffed reindeer (same one as here, actually); I imagine the robot would be somewhat confused.
That was awesome! I loved it!
Thank you!
I absolutely loved this! The big difference in how the kids talked versus Jubal was so well written! I think my favorite part was at the beginning: "No cap, bruh." That made me laugh so hard. That and when the drone identified him as a woodland creature 😂😂
Thank you very much! I am glad you enjoyed it--it was very fun to write as well!
Oh Scoot this was wonderful! I love coming into this world through the eyes of a protagonist so detached from the pain of the prompt. There was a fantastic juggling of scifi/horror and humor in this entire story, from the conversation between Jubal and the strangers, to the flying machine's categorization of Jubal as a "Woodland creature," I enjoyed this whole ride.
Thank you for participating in this month's Prompt Celebration and adding your fiction to our party!
I am happy you enjoyed it! Thank you for hosting the Write-Together, I am already looking forward to next month!
I for one appreciated Jubal's proper use of y'all; growing up across the river from Kentucky, I was taught early on that y'all can be used for a group smaller than five, above that it's "all y'all." :) This was awesome; the kids' dialogue and Jubal's were spot-on!
That makes a lot of sense--that must be one of those folk-grammar rules I have some how assimilated without really knowing. But you're right! Glad you enjoyed, thanks Michael!
“CATEGORIZING: WOODLAND CREATURE. THREAT LEVEL: ZERO. DO NOT ENGAGE.” 🤣🤣
Simply fantastic Scoot! The dialogue is top-shelf! How you got all of this from that prompt.... you've got a gift sir.
Thank you so much Derek. I love subverting prompts, so this was a fun one. Thank you so much for reading 😂
Your narration cracked me up; I loved it! Jubal explaining about their dumb idea was just hilarious. I agree with you about the beautiful scenery of the Appalachians; my wife and I spent our honeymoon in Gatlinburg in Tennessee, and those hills are just stunning.
Also: now I'm wondering how a robot would categorize me: I'm still on Facebook but not Twitter, and my Facebook picture is my childhood stuffed reindeer (same one as here, actually); I imagine the robot would be somewhat confused.
No network matches found, so you'd be safe but I have bad news for your reindeer.